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Saturday, May 1, 2010

Escape!

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 10; the tenth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.


Standing at the mountaintop
I spread my hands freely
To touch the horizon
That keeps calling me

And when I looked down
Gazed at every small detail around
Detached, losing meaning
And nearby sounds!

My mind reminds
Asks me to unwind

No one to care for
No one to share with
No one to talk to
No one to fight with
No one to roam around
No one to say anything!

Ah! I just need a fall
Free flowing!
Enroute to my meeting with the horizon
Giving me the escape of my life!

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16 comments:

Nethra said...

Wow! Nice words and it would be the exact words i would be quoting when I am standing on a mountain top (only if i didn't suffer height-phobia).
Nice poem! :)
All the best for blog-a-ton! :)

The Fool said...

nice poetry. it was brilliant from a conceptual point of view on what you one things standing on top of a hill contemplating suicide. but felt the words could have been richer. but then that is me. simplicity of course has its own charm. best of luck for the blog-a-ton.

The Fool said...

by the way, typo in title. also blog-a-ton rules say post title must be 'escape' - not a word more not a word less. so i suggest you change before marshal disqualifies you.

Leo said...

I agree with TF.. this was a nice poem, and when no one wants to give us company, we all feel like this.. plz change the title soon.. its a good poem, shd not be DQed coz of that! :)

Escape

- The Virgin Author! said...

The title is flawed. The poem ain't. Well written.

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Sourav C. Pandey said...

We all need that free flowing, you managed to speak your mind only with such few simple and nice words .. I really appreciate that! :)

One of the bests in the BAT this time ! :)

All the best !
..escape !

Sureindran said...

You have penned down loneliness your way beautifully and I like the poem very much. Thanks for writing this.

Sureindran R. - Escape

geeta said...

You poured down your feelings brilliantly...


All the Best for BAT 10

Mahesh Kalaal said...

seems simple... but it said more than it contained...
liked the first four lines....

pawan said...

Somehow this poem impressed me a lot, the starting according to me has a surreal feel. Sometimes the frills are not needed to make a poem work and this one is a good example for that!

Great going!
Cheers :)

Saro said...

Like a bird, free falling :)All the luck with BATOM 10

Rachana said...

@Nethra, @Saro, @Pawan, @Mahesh, @Geeta, @Sureinder, @Sourav, @The Virgin Author - thank you so much for your comments and best wishes!

@The Fool and @Leo - sorry about the typo...I have changed the title. Thanks!

Siddhesh 'Ravan' Kabe said...

hey the concept of free flowing... excellent...:)

dmanji said...

A poem with suicide as theme ....but your word didn't make it dark....

Vipul Grover said...

Well the feelings of a lonely person on verge of committing suicide put in a nice manner.. I dont feel, as some hav cmmntd, tht the wrds shud be more weighty or dark.. liked ur take!

evanescentthoughts said...

A Suicide poem? that was so different. An utterly dejected and depressed person I guess. Good one :)

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